Thesis (Sorry, its a bad one): Our versions of cool will be different or similar depending on the sources that we use as well as the cues from our cultural map that develop the roles we play and who we think we are.
You talk a lot about your cultural maps and how it affect our movements in our lives. Our environmental and social cues also applied to our lives as our point of view in these two cues changes how we are. I like how you added your own experience as well as examples to support your thinking. All of us have preferences that our cultural map provides but we also provide our own by adding other cultural maps into our ideal self. However, with our cultural maps, how our environment goes, it all comes down to the choices that we make. No matter what happens, it is because we chose this or that; we try to take what is the best for us (in our environment or when socializing with people).
I like how your second to your last paragraph goes when you talk about "this is how someone sees me as; it isn't what I have to be". I think it is a strong connection to prove that you have control over yourself. We take in social and environmental cues, our cultural map and everything else, but it doesn't mean we have to follow what they say. You "tweak" your role(s) because you don't want to be "stagnation cool". Just like how we get old, we change how we live our lives as we see what happens to the world and we follow some of it. It is like how cool works because if we change, cool change. I guess Cool is not on any cultural maps, but it is what we think of cool that it can be in all the cultural maps and so we make choices in following it or not.
(Hope this is helpful):
In your section of Roles, at the second to the last paragraph, you said, "I think exploring and finding out what suits you as role is", is this a whole sentence already or do you have more to add? o-o
- On your last paragraph about nature versus nurture, I think you should expand that a bit more. I think it can split into two paragraphs and one for nature, one for nurture. I find that nurture is more to the connection to your thesis and nature is our choices in our lives. But aren't those two the same because we can't be who we really are since we don't know so both of them are influencing we live our lives and etc.
-What kind of messages are the cultural map giving us? Is it good/bad choice or is the messages giving to us depend on the environment or society that we are living in? Is our cultural maps born with the aspect of the environment and social cues or did we create in our minds?
Your paper is very strong in my view and so my suggestions and comments are kind of all over the place since you talk a lot about it. xD ~good work~ ^-^
Maggie:
I like your thesis but are you saying this hole of ours are the emptiness that we feel (but may not notice) and then go to find something to be able to fill up this hole. You are also talking about how we are seeking for attention and approval by "masking, manipulating, costuming, adorning and aggrandizing ourselves" because we want to be valued.
Thesis: We are unable to fill up this hole within ourselves so we are constantly finding ways to seek attention and approval by trying to be cool.
I think your arguments are that all of us are falling into one of the "teenage archetypes". If we can be at the top of the cool hierarchy, we are able to feel what we are desiring. To be at the top, you are saying we need to become one of the "mythical roles" that society, or us has put out there for people who can be cool. If we are unable to fill the roles that people around us wants us to be, we would be falling down on the bottom of the hierarchy. I think your argument about roles and the quest to become cool is good because I also think it is in our nature that we want to become cool and by fitting in one of the roles that society sees highly, we would feel the glory in ourselves and from others.
The holes in ourselves are the emptiness, and the feeling of wanting to become valued connects to those holes. We are stuck in our lives by constantly chasing after the thing that can help us feel better. Like the drug argument in your paper, how drugs can only give a person a temporary feeling of cool. I think it just affects, a waste of time for our lives to do things for other people since wanting to become cool is from the society's point of view. We forget how to do this our own way that can help us lessen this hole of ours. I think the holes in ourselves that you are talking about are for ourselves to fulfill by being what choices that society is giving to us.
Hope this will help you:
-I think you should put the last paragraph, your first body paragraph as you are talking about what is cool.
-Talk about emptiness (western way, not eastern or you can talk about the buddhism for significance/connections or OPV).
- Is cool a group or an individual thing? Is it because we want to be in a group that we change ourselves, as the individual to a groupie thing? Is being the top of the group the individual, or is being in the group but not at the top, the group? The person being in the top is the leader, does that mean the people who are not, are the copy cats of the leader? So does that mean those copycats, the look alikes would not feel value no more because they all look alike, dressed alike and etc. ?
-Is cool a choice that we are making? Are we forced in this particular role that society is giving us or are we the one who is thinking that we are being looked to become at this particular role?
-I like your arguments, but I think you can give more example from your street interviews, or from the books that we read.
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